She was a MOTHER
of many kinds.
Caring, friendly,
and always one
to have fun.
We never knew
time could go by
so fast.
and when it came,
it was like a bullet
that had just
been shot.
She was drained out
like a fire hydrant
after the flames that
had been put out.
We didn't know how to say
goodbye,
when we had just said
hello.
We thought to ourselves,
if love could have
saved her,
shouldn't she have lived forever?
But, forever is just too long
when her time had
come to an abrupt stop.
Does my poem need more to end it?
Do I need more description?
3 comments:
this is a really cool poem. i like it.
i think the end is fantastic, it really makes your impact deep.
I love this, your a really good writer Kelsey, it really makes you eel in the writers shoes, now do the kiddy or kitty voice :)
I really like the ending to your poem, it makes the reader feel how you are feeling. I also really like how you changed the colors of some words to give it a little more.. good job! :)
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